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SolderIron
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Trying to finish a poem started by someone in the past.
The beautiful moon
Shine not in the afternoon
In mind like old tune
The beautiful moon
Shine not in the afternoon
In mind like old tune
Quadman2
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Is this the birth of a rock tune?
If so, I can see this musical event.
Q
Not a rock tune. If it was the first line would be, Loudly crashing in...
SolderIron
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Had a reference to a Frank Sinatra record - Live with the Nelson Riddle Orchestra -
mid 60s, but the song goes back to the 40s - I looked it up:
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Moonlight_in_Vermont_(song)
The lyrics are unusual in that they do not rhyme.
John Blackburn, the lyricist, has been quoted as saying,
"After completing the first 12 bars of the lyric, I realized there was no rhyme and then said to Karl, 'Let’s follow the pattern of no rhyme throughout the song. It seemed right.'"
The lyrics are also unconventional in that each verse (not counting the bridge) is a haiku.
It shifts a bit later - but - what do you think?
Pennies in a stream
Falling leaves the sycamore
Moonlight in Vermont
Icy finger waves
Ski trails down the mountainside
Snow light in Vermont
Telegraph cables, they sing down the highway
And travel each bend in the road
People who meet in this romantic setting
Are so hypnotized by the lovely
Evening summer breeze
Warbling of the meadowlark
Moonlight in Vermont
Telegraph cables, how they sing down the highway
And they travel each bend in the road
People who meet in this romantic setting
Are so hypnotized by the lovely
Evening summer breeze
The warbling of the meadowlark
Moonlight in Vermont
Moonlight in Vermont
Moonlight in Vermont
Oh, and Frank first did it in '58 - but did it live many times ...
mid 60s, but the song goes back to the 40s - I looked it up:
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Moonlight_in_Vermont_(song)
The lyrics are unusual in that they do not rhyme.
John Blackburn, the lyricist, has been quoted as saying,
"After completing the first 12 bars of the lyric, I realized there was no rhyme and then said to Karl, 'Let’s follow the pattern of no rhyme throughout the song. It seemed right.'"
The lyrics are also unconventional in that each verse (not counting the bridge) is a haiku.
It shifts a bit later - but - what do you think?
Pennies in a stream
Falling leaves the sycamore
Moonlight in Vermont
Icy finger waves
Ski trails down the mountainside
Snow light in Vermont
Telegraph cables, they sing down the highway
And travel each bend in the road
People who meet in this romantic setting
Are so hypnotized by the lovely
Evening summer breeze
Warbling of the meadowlark
Moonlight in Vermont
Telegraph cables, how they sing down the highway
And they travel each bend in the road
People who meet in this romantic setting
Are so hypnotized by the lovely
Evening summer breeze
The warbling of the meadowlark
Moonlight in Vermont
Moonlight in Vermont
Moonlight in Vermont
Oh, and Frank first did it in '58 - but did it live many times ...
Quadman2
Lunatic Member
BRIAN'S BEGINNING
No, you've just started
to create few word poems
that tell of life's paths.
Q
Don Ellis?
Haikus from Don's LP
A long gone artist with gifts,
how is the music?
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https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Don_Ellis
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Haiku_(Don_Ellis_album)
Haikus from Don's LP
A long gone artist with gifts,
how is the music?
)=(
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Don_Ellis
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Haiku_(Don_Ellis_album)
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